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代写1809NRS Written Essay Final
1809NRS - Written Essay Final
by Kiu Tsz Carol Wong
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1809NRS - Written Essay Final
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
Kiu Tsz Carol -
This has been a start but I think you are
conf used about the requirements f or the essay.
I would like to suggest that you get some
assistance with your writing and ref erencing,
either at the Grif f ith library or at the School of
Nursing and Midwif ery.
This will help you in your f uture assessment
items as they become more complex.
Best wishes,
Sue
Susan M De Vries, RN, DipAppSci(NrsEd), BA,
MPH, FACN
Sessional Lecturer, School of Nursing and
Midwif ery, Grif f ith University
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Comment 1 | Present at ion /5
essay
Comment 2 | Present at ion /5
inf luenza
Comment 3 | Present at ion /5
Inf luenza - do not use inf ormal language with university assessment items.
Comment 4 | Present at ion /5
this means the same thing.
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Comment 5 | Inf . Cont rol Precaut ions /20
How can this be taught to her with her language background?
Comment 6 | Inf . Cont rol Precaut ions /20
correct. What are the details of use?
Comment 7 | Assess. & Nursing Care /25
I am not sure how Mrs Turay is going to get a laboratory acquired inf ection here.
Justif ication?
Comment 8 | Present at ion /5
Do not use contractions in f ormal university level assessment items. Best to spell out f ull
words to be consistent with f ormal language use.
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Comment 9 | Assess. & Nursing Care /25
not sure why this is relevant to your nursing care and case study. Justif y?
Comment 10 | Assess. & Nursing Care /25
not a nursing assessment or nursing care.
Comment 11 | Assess. & Nursing Care /25
what about social isolation? Cohorting may be more usef ul in residential care.
Comment 12 | Assess. & Nursing Care /25
and the other residents in care.
Comment 13 | Assess. & Nursing Care /25
This is a repeat of earlier inf ormation.
Comment 14 | Assess. & Nursing Care /25
any ref erences?
Comment 15 | Assess. & Nursing Care /25
She has been in Australia ten years. Not sure of your point here. Yan resource does not
seem to be linked to the topic.
Comment 16 | Present at ion /5
whose
Comment 17 | Present at ion /5
delete
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Comment 18 | Assess. & Nursing Care /25
Not sure of your point here. Ref erence seems to be f rom dental hygiene source. How is this
relevant here?
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INTRODUCTION /5
9
DISCUSS INFLUENZA /20
9
INF. CONTROL PRECAUTIONS /20
GRADING FORM: 1809 ESSAY
KIU TSZ CAROL WONG 42
4 Introduction present but vague in places.
Influenza characteristics not identified. Modes of
spread described. Risks to the elderly briefly
mentioned without reference support.
A few general precautions mentioned without
details. Could also include: Single use of dishes or
sterilization. I would like to see details of your
knowledge and understanding of the procedures
in more specific detail.
10
ASSESS. & NURSING CARE /25
INTERDISCIPLINARY TEAM /10
CONCLUSION /5
3
PRESENTATION /5
4
REFERENCING /10
3
Relevant risk assessments not identified. Nothing
about falls risk or pressure area risk or nursing
care associated.
No mention of anyone from the multidisciplinary care team such
as physiotherapist, translator, dietician or such like.
Conclusion present but unlinked to essay and
vaguely written.
Many errors of writing making the essay difficult
to understand in places. Formatting rules not all
applied.
APA use inaccurate. For example, reference list
not in alphabetical order. Many sources from
journals only vaguely related to the topic.
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